Interesting chop. Maybe desaturate the skin a little to make it appear paler ? Good luck !

He's spooky, Cherish is right about the skin tone.

Thx I made it more pale..

Looks better. Just a suggestion though, Vampires don't have wrinkles and some skin imperfections, they just have the perfect type of skin, I would suggest removing all little imperfections with the clone tool, but that's just IMO.

Eyes and teeth are good and i like the Imperfections but that is more personally preference. The writing on the skin looks to be floating just above it, maybe try a simple overlay and then duplicate the layer to improve contrast, also adjust the orientation a very small amount mainly the writing on the forehead.

Thanks for the advice I'm working on it...

i really like the eye color

Very threatening. The skin tone could be a more ashen (less red). The tiny tatoos don't add anything IMO.

The eyes are about the only thing that make this a vamp..The teeth are just in bad need of a dentist more than anything. Although the in your face" effect you've created can be frightening and of a resemblance to a vamp, it just doesn't quite make it for me, IMO.