I liked the other wings better. These are too transparent and don't really look like part of the body...

Maybe you're right but I wanted to give the source image more presence, thank you for your comment

It's better, now that you've added back a bit of the wing effect. Just colored light wasn't enough.

personal views: take out the light rays, let the girl have normal eyes,
make the two-piece suit into a glitter-like suit instead, add to the whole body with some glitters

Nicely done author! Best of luck!