The glows should only be on the weapon end of the swords, which would glow from the insides and not have shadows. You've made the background too dark to let the figures pop. This could be great with some tweaks. GL author.

You were absolutely right did some changes, based on your comments. Thanks!

Much improved!

The image looks a little flat on my monitor and i guess it will improve when you increase the contrast with levels or curves. Also, the background is lit by strong directed light, but the figures (esp. the girl) are more evenly lit.
On the happy side, it is a well composed image and the relative propertions seems to be ok. So, i'll be happy to see you can make it even better.

The lights are all different...

Too much green for me. Too many distractions IMO.
But a nice idea. Good luck